Revising the 1Report

To start, it took me a while to understand what I did wrong on my rough draft because it was not clear to me in the way the report was supposed to be written. So by comparing the sample that Dr. Archibald had shown to the class to my rough draft I believe that I have figured it out. The comments posted by Dr. Archibald on the sample paper were great guidence for me. It also helped that during my writing conference session my tutor explained that the format of the paper was a rhetorical analysis not a summary of our chosen document. The problem was that I summarized Riis's document How the Other Half Lives instead of taking a slower appraoch by analyzing how he writes to unveil his ideas and beliefs. I learned that just by seeing the writer's tone and style of how he fromatted his work I can understand the author's true motives and what exactly he or she is trying to point out. Before I thoght the focus of the report was to report all that we learned from reading our chosen document. However the focus is more of a mix of what questions do I have from reading it and what we understood. I should use most of my quotes and paraphrases from my other sources to either help anwer my questions or help get my point accross. I also need to leave out more of my opinion on the subject. The paper is suppsed to be our reaction to reading our document and waht we don't and do understand from it. I need to use more info from my other sources that connect to my topic. At the end when we have to mention how our subject relates to today's world, I plan on connecting Riis's ideas and actions to today's relevant issues. I am very optimistic now that I can successfully write a hopefully great final draft.